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October 11, 2011

Filed under: poems —— oliviaacevedo @ 6:09 am

Help me get rid of this pain in my chest

This life is becoming too much for me

Spinning in circles my head is a mess.

 

It’s been far to long since I’ve laid to rest

Piles of papers are all I can see

Help me get rid of this pain in my chest.

 

Work, work and more work; oh God there’s a test?

Nine hours a day no time to study

Spinning in circles my head is a mess.

 

Burnt out, is the semester over yet?

Is this really worth a college degree?

Help me get rid of this pain in my chest.

 

My mind is broken, a leaky faucet

Dripping and dripping it drains all of me

Spinning in circles my head is a mess.

 

Desperation kicks in; temptations set

This life is becoming too much for me

Just one little fix, that isn’t far fetched…

Help me get rid of this pain in my chest.

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  1.   Pru Says:

    I really liked the poem. It is on a topic that I can relate too. It does follw rhe villinella style. I really like that it repeats at times. It is different from your blog topics. 🙂

  2.   jenny abeles Says:

    Hey Olive. I kind of agree with Prudence that this is different from your blog topic (and anything you write from here on can be as different as you want it to be), but in another way, it jives well with your blog, wch mentioned a few times how important good lyrics are to you. You seem to disdain corny, canned, reheated, cliched, offensive, ridiculous lyrics–but genuine, heartfelt, and intelligent lyrics are a tall order. Still, that’s what you’ve achieved here. You’ve swayed from the villanelle form somewhat, but that’s oddly fitting in this particular poem, a poem about falling apart and losing it a little bit. It would be almost unnerving to see perfect villanelle form given what you’re talking about.

    So, I gather that you’re fed up with schoolwork, but let me ask you–are you proud of this poem? You should be. You should be proud of all the work you’ve done for this class so far, and that may or may not be worth the toil. I have my own thoughts about the uses and abuses of a college degree, and would be happy to chat with you on the subject anytime.

    In the meantime, please bring this to class tomorrow!

  3.   samantha Says:

    Interesting poem!! I loved reading it. The poem itself falls into a limbo because the topic of being a mess and the structured form of villanellla seem to be quarreling with each other.

  4.   michelle Says:

    I agree with Professor, this is different from your previous blog topic. I realy enjoyed your poem. It was really interesting..

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